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PostSubject: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:29 am

Sonic gets banged up in a battle with eggman and asks razor to finish the job.

Eggmans machine is powered by the seven Chaos emeralds and he has 5.Razor had one and sonic gave him his.So when razor battled eggmans big robot and lost, eggman created chaos control and slipped him and his whole base to the future.50 years to be exact.

When Razor finds out what year hes in, he hears the sound of an alarm.An extreme gear store got robbed by 2 hedgehogs,1 fox,1 echidna and a bat.Razor rushed toward the store and hears the shopkeeper yell out RAZOR THE HEDGEHOG!!!!! Razor (2) tured around and (me) razor saw his horn on the black hedgehog.

Then Razor found eggman and demended to make another machine.But eggman needed the seven chaos emeralds, to power it up.Razor set out.He befriended 2 hedgehogs named Moriah and Rhys and they introduced him to the other 2 members of thier racing team.

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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:34 am

Razor the Hedgehog wrote:
So im thinking about making a stroy with my new look.

Razor is battling dr.eggman and his machine blows up and sends them to a different planet with inhabitants just like mobius.
Razor has his new look and his xstar is changed to a lightsaber type sword.He wins a big extreme gear race and wins his own xtreme gear.Then he gets chased by the cops becaused someone used identidy theft on him for robbing a bank.So razor is wanted in a new planet and dr.eggman has his own racers, for the underground racing unit.Razor gets invited to join a team of 4 to make 5 racers.And they race.

I need a name for the planet,razors extreme gear,and I need the 4 other racers.Who ever wants to be eggmans 4 evil racers post or who wants to be on razors team post. Its your choice.

My character could make a guest appearance and be on your team.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 08, 2010 7:26 am

I got a little confused reading your ideas. They just seemed all over the place.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Mon Jun 21, 2010 12:15 pm

well.Simple.Razor battles dr.eggman.Machine explodes and send them into the distant future.Razor wins a big extreme gear race and gets his first extreme gear.He joins an underground racing team. I havent made anything else to the plot but...Razor has a new look for the xstar.ill post it later on.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Mon Jun 21, 2010 1:48 pm

XStar sounds like the ZSaber.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Mon Jun 21, 2010 10:29 pm

You could ask Moriah if she wants to be in it Razor.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 22, 2010 12:03 am

Um
dude Razor would you mind improving your grammar?
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 22, 2010 12:03 am

Rhys the Hedgehog wrote:
You could ask Moriah if she wants to be in it Razor.
Of course I want to be in Rhys.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 22, 2010 11:53 am

Moriah the hedgehog wrote:
Rhys the Hedgehog wrote:
You could ask Moriah if she wants to be in it Razor.
Of course I want to be in Rhys.

Okay, there's 2 Razor.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 22, 2010 12:13 pm

You have GOT to explain more than that. Why the heck was he fighting Eggman? And if he was "sent to the future," why would he just randomly enter an Extreme Gear race? I mean, shouldn't he be trying to find out what's going on, where he is, heck, what TIMELINE he's in? The order of these events and how Razor responds to them is unlikely at best.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Wed Jun 23, 2010 6:17 am

big change of the story.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Wed Jun 23, 2010 6:53 am

Still confused. Maybe it's the grammar?
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Wed Jun 23, 2010 7:12 am

That sounds good Razor. What would the other two members be though?
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Wed Jun 23, 2010 9:13 am

I can understand it better now, but overall its still...crappy. Sorry, but the story and events just seem really bad.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Wed Jun 23, 2010 7:12 pm

Hey Razor, let me help you a little bit with your story please? As of so far, I really want to help improve your grammar and how the event of the story can make since.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Thu Jun 24, 2010 8:50 am

This story didn't make an inch of sense to me.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Sat Jun 26, 2010 3:40 am

huh.ok im doing my best to understand the story myself.But its just a draft.And moriah if you want to you can.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Sat Jun 26, 2010 4:17 am

Alright then, PM me some of the story and I can help you with the grammar and understanding.
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PostSubject: Re: Razor the hedgehog:Underground   Tue Jun 29, 2010 2:27 am

alright
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